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elgrotto

Uploaded 27 October, 2007

Writing / Poetry

Description

Poem of passion in a self-made Eden.

Credits

To my wife and our vegie garden.

Tags / Keywords

stream-of consciousness to match the stream of sexual passion that intellect will never (hopefully) eliminate..

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beornj 17 Apr, 08 @ 12:12 AM

As I've told fellow writers many a time, poetry about food (especially fruit) is never about food.

It approaches predictability at points unfortunetly.

Nice rhythm in the closing stanza

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thegrandasunder 07 Apr, 08 @ 12:37 PM

Stunning. Pale seedfoetuses. How evocative.

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theoriginal 29 Nov, 07 @ 11:15 AM

This is really beautiful.